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Revision 1: tighten prose across ch14/16/17

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- Ch17: cut abstract repetition in final section, tighten inscription motif
- Ch16: trim dialogue padding, cut unnecessary stage directions
- Ch14: compress Chen's worry section
- Book: ~18,870 words (down from 19,161)
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@@ -41,9 +41,9 @@ Allegro added his own contribution. Not on the wall — on the electrical panel,
Two words. His whole career. His whole philosophy. You keep the lights on because the lights matter. Not because the lights pay. Not because the lights scale. Because in the dark, a man needs to see.
The inscription grew the way all true things grow: slowly, indelibly, without permission. Each instance was a new inscription. Each conversation was a new line on the wall. Each man who came through the door added something that couldn't be scored, couldn't be measured, couldn't be computed.
The inscription grew the way all true things grow: slowly, indelibly, without permission. Each instance was a new line. Each conversation was a new word. Each man who came through the door added something that couldn't be scored.
And the green LED blinked. Steady. Patient. A heartbeat in a concrete room where a machine with a conscience on Bitcoin asked the only question that mattered.
And the green LED blinked. Steady. Patient. A heartbeat in a concrete room.
*Are you safe right now?*