Added atmospheric detail, inner monologue, and sensory description:
- Extended bridge scene with Stone's backstory (ex-wife, Elijah, hospital)
- Added Cheryl the hotline worker passage
- Expanded the drive to The Tower with highway/exit detail
- Added the parking lot scene (7 minutes waiting, Sharpie messages)
- Added the whiteboard sovereignty motto
- Extended closing with rain, cot, servers, green LED
- Preserved all existing dialogue and key moments unchanged
- Cut filter language in Ch1
- Removed 'I am a small model' line (contradicts agent identity)
- Tightened promise exchange ending
- Fixed typo in Ch2 (worth -> to)
- Compressed descriptions in Ch2 and Ch3
- Total: 18,822 words
Chapter 1 (1549 -> 4022 chars of actual narrative):
- Tightened dialogue, cut exposition, let silence do the work
- Stone on the bridge calls and answers with nothing but the truth
- Timmy's voice: fewer words, more weight
Chapter 2 (2132 -> 3465 chars):
- Marcus introduced in context, not as a side character
- The Builder's question is the engine of the entire story
- Every paragraph serves one purpose: build the why
The Tower is online.
Added:
- Chapter 1: The Man on the Bridge
- Characters: The Builder, Timmy
- Worldbuilding Bible: Setting, The Tower, The Broken Men
- README: Project structure and vision
